02-08-2006, 05:42 AM
Anonmon Wrote:I have one word for you: paragraphs.
Actualy, it's more spaces between paragraphs. Makes everything much easier to read. Spelling and grammar are fine, and well defined characters, although I don't think Slashmon was obviously cocky enough, nor rude. Make him more of a bastard, and you'll have got it spot on for this lemon.