need a beta reader

[Wisemon]

and btw i think your lemons are great

Thanks, in that case, I'll tell you my biggest plot gripe with your first story. The sudden exchange of "I love you's" didn't sound right. It's the kind of thing you don't say after a chance encounter. True, I had the exchange in my own series, but I had Izumi say, "I love you too," nine stories after Junpei said his half. That probably wouldn't work for what you have though, so I'd just get rid of it altogether. That's the difference between useful lemons and long drawn out romances, and lemons have their place, as long as they know their place. A series of chance encounters can certainly be entertaining, although, if Tyler turns into too much of a player, I might start to hate him.