05-21-2010, 04:35 PM
Well, It's good. Your first person is better than most that I read. I wouldn't dare use this as toilet paper!
See that guy, he's a drifter! But drifting leads to Bickering, Bickering leads to Karate, and Karate leads to flying around between windows and shit! Then a big guy starts shooting lightning everywhere and Kurt Russell Shows up and Kicks his Ass!