07-16-2007, 10:23 PM
Quick constructive critisism: I skimmed through the lemon a little and was too disgusted to read the whole thing.
Guys, this is a reveiw forum. IF you're gonig to comment on a person's stroy, you flesh out your logic. Characterisation, spelling, grammar, story.... there are plenty of thingfs to comment on. If it was effective, why? And if it was ineffective, where and how?
First off, changing the names does not make a Digimon lemon. All it does is ensure your characterisation is wrong. Secondly, don't put out a lemon if you know there are errors you need to change.
Guys, this is a reveiw forum. IF you're gonig to comment on a person's stroy, you flesh out your logic. Characterisation, spelling, grammar, story.... there are plenty of thingfs to comment on. If it was effective, why? And if it was ineffective, where and how?
First off, changing the names does not make a Digimon lemon. All it does is ensure your characterisation is wrong. Secondly, don't put out a lemon if you know there are errors you need to change.