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What is this now? Number 4?
That One Internet Guy
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03-05-2007, 05:55 AM
I re-read this, and I can find a few places where the detail is...lacking. Severely.


For a small example, I never really elaborated on the effect of the smoke grenades.


Also; I totally misused semi-colons; in like 3 places, they're in the wrong place; something I should fix.
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[No subject] - by That One Internet Guy - 10-18-2006, 11:16 AM
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[No subject] - by Wisemon - 10-23-2006, 10:34 AM
[No subject] - by That One Internet Guy - 03-05-2007, 05:55 AM
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