dreams to nightmares part 3

[Outlaw Torn44]

Well hell, that was better than the last installment by far. Your attention to detail really does show in the midsection centering around Daisuke. Your still able to get through to the reader with the thoughts and emotions your trying to convey, very nicely. You might want to watch your tenses though, those can be tricky, something I found out the hard way. @@;;

Can't wait to see what happens next