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A lemon I did. Any replies, quotes, tips?
Darkfox
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06-29-2003, 12:50 PM
Cool shit man...Action packed with a nice warm hearted finish...one suggestion I could think of is split the paragraph up a little, it was a tad bit bulky and hard to read when it's all cluttered.

Aside from that, Top Notch! lol, adios.
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[No subject] - by Evil Summoner - 06-26-2003, 10:38 AM
[No subject] - by Darkfox - 06-29-2003, 12:50 PM
[No subject] - by Darkmole - 06-30-2003, 12:47 PM
[No subject] - by Darkfox - 06-30-2003, 01:55 PM
[No subject] - by darkcrow - 06-30-2003, 02:20 PM
[No subject] - by Darkmole - 06-30-2003, 02:26 PM
[No subject] - by Darkfox - 06-30-2003, 02:56 PM
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