My AU of Red Rover's End Game story

[Marine]

If this were my style, there would be euphony, foreshadowing, and complex metaphors

It would. However, in the genre depicted the need for glitsy glamour and why-the-red-wheel-barrow-gives-the-little-boy-nightmares symbolism, and how a pimple relates to the Himalayas and Sally Struthers is irrelevant.

This genre needs a definitive picture of the world. A world of atmosphere that diffuses the lines of fiction into reality, where cold is no longer white, but weak grey.

the fight scenes would be a lot more interesting.

... I'd stick with the why-the-red-wheel-barrow-gives-the-little-boy-nightmares symbolism, and how a pimple relates to the Himalayas and Sally Struthers points and leave the skin cleaving to us proffesionals who've had experience in those kind of things....