One day; Ash, Brock, Misty and May were as usual on their journey to make it as Poke-masters. But a Tornado came their way and separated Ash and Brock away from Misty and May. Ash and Brock landed in the savannah unharmed.
Ash: Brock Are you alright?
Brock: Yeah I
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It felt rushed, try to expand a bit, be more discriptive.
To this, I would like to add: MISTY ISN'T IN ADVANCE! I know there's a hug eappeal in doing a nice little Yuri story, but the thing reeks of continuity gaps because it's a Kasu... Misty x May fic.
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Actually Misty does make a brief appearence (3-4 episode) late in Advance or maybe the season after, but May is there to the best of my knowledge.