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Dispair of the Cursed: Chapter 2 is complete! >X3 - Master Grim - 09-13-2006 Working on Chapter 1 edit and CHAPTER 2 IS DONE! >XD [quote=I] Chapter 1 Flames - Kurtz - 09-15-2006 I'm loving it so far... *grins* I'd like to see more of this. - Master Grim - 09-15-2006 Thanks! Good luck with... You know what. And... Good luck with something travel related too! - Marine - 09-15-2006 The only problem I'd like to point out is that your characters lack a decent picture for me to visualize. You need to develop the story narritive a little more so the reader isn't completely lost. What does Kerred look like? Where does Derel live? What does it look like? If you expand the narritive bigger I think you'd have a set story, kinda like a pre-developed Eragon to some degree. If you desire any help, I can offer some advice to get yourself some vivid characterization and descriptions! Other than that I can't complain. - Master Grim - 09-15-2006 *bows to Marine* That is why I posted it here. I would be honored. (I am NOT kidding!) To the people of the DaD: I am still improving this chapter. ^_^ ANY comment is welcome. |